The day started with a banana and two raw eggs in the blender. The air smelled like victory. It was the day of the title fight.
Chuck sat down and turned on the TV. Chuck did this every morning, although he didn't really know why. He didn't care enough to watch, it was a habit. Chuck's father told him he turned the tv on to avoid the sound of his rotten thoughts, but Chuck didn't care about that either. In fact, Chuck didn't really really care about anything at all. Anything except winning.
Chuck was strong for 170 pounds. He looked intimidating by most standards. His gaze never wandered, and he had a habit of ignoring people whenever they started talked about themselves. There was nothing quite so boring as people talking about themselves.
On that day chuck wouldn't be bored by anything. On that day chuck knew he would face the greatest challenge and the greatest opportunity of his lifetime.
The phone rang, interrupting Chuck's thoughts, "Hello."
A man answered, "Look for a red tie, 4th row pews at St. Madelines, 9 AM." Then the man hung up.
Chuck then took the elevator down from his flat at castle apartments and walked out the door.
Chuck sat down and turned on the TV. Chuck did this every morning, although he didn't really know why. He didn't care enough to watch, it was a habit. Chuck's father told him he turned the tv on to avoid the sound of his rotten thoughts, but Chuck didn't care about that either. In fact, Chuck didn't really really care about anything at all. Anything except winning.
Chuck was strong for 170 pounds. He looked intimidating by most standards. His gaze never wandered, and he had a habit of ignoring people whenever they started talked about themselves. There was nothing quite so boring as people talking about themselves.
On that day chuck wouldn't be bored by anything. On that day chuck knew he would face the greatest challenge and the greatest opportunity of his lifetime.
The phone rang, interrupting Chuck's thoughts, "Hello."
A man answered, "Look for a red tie, 4th row pews at St. Madelines, 9 AM." Then the man hung up.
Chuck then took the elevator down from his flat at castle apartments and walked out the door.
I LOVE THE BEGINNING OF YOUR POST. It's great that you didn't use something cliché like "the usual." The vividness of the sentence makes me know Chuck immediately as a gross guy. I'd like to know exactly where in Castle Apartments Chuck lives so I can avoid interacting with him.
ReplyDelete"Chuck's father told him he turned the tv on to avoid the sound of his rotten thoughts" was also a really clever way of working in the smell (though it didn't quite relate to the outside world, but whatever). Next time you write, make sure that you capitalize Chuck every time – it distracted from the plot.
I like how much you pack into the short post. The repeated use of "Chuck did this, Chuck did that" makes me feel like I know Chuck really well for how little I've read about him. Now I'm curious as to what opportunity Chuck is about to face. Next post, I'd love for Chuck to do something really awful so that I have a concrete reason to hate him...